IELTS Writing Task 1
The numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum (1 Table and 2 Pie Charts)

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
  • Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task 1 - Diagram Essay

How to answer this essay?
  • Introducion
  • Paraphrase the statement on the question paper to describe what the table and charts show.
  • Overview
  • Identify key features i.e. major changes.
  • Description of table
  • Detailed information about the table – dates/figures/changes
  • Description of pie charts
  • Detailed information about the pie charts – dates/figures/changes

Information Search
  • What information does the table give?
  • What do the pie charts illustrate?
  • Which years is the data taken from?
  • Which year had the highest number of visitors?
  • Which year had higher levels of visitor satisfaction?
  • What is the difference in the number of people went to the museum before and after it was refurbished?
  • How can you express this change as a percentage or fraction?
  • What proportion of visitors felt very satisfied or satisfied before and after the renovations?
  • How many people were dissatisfied or very dissatisfied before and after the improvements?
  • What proportion of visitors did not respond to the survey in both years?

Model Answer | Marked as Band 8
Cohesive connecting words that improve coherence in writing . Useful less common words that boost fluency in writing .
  • The table1  gives information about the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum2  while the pie charts illustrate the level of visitor satisfaction. The statistics are taken from the years before and after the refurbishment of the museum.
  • It is3  noticeable that in the4  year following the improvements more people went to the museum and they generally felt more satisfied after their visit.
  • Looking at the figures in the table, visitor numbers5  went up from 74,000 to 92,000 after the renovations. This is a6  significant increase of 18,000, or7  just under 25%.
  • 8  Turning to the pie charts, it is interesting to see that visitors who felt very satisfied or satisfied rose considerably from 45% before it was refurbished to 75% after.9  Conversely, the proportion of those who were dissatisfied or very dissatisfied more than halved, from 50% before the changes to 20% after. Finally, the10  proportion of visitors who did not11  respond to the survey12  remained unchanged at just 5% in both years.
163 words

Possible Synonyms
  • gives – presents /displays /shows / provides
  • while – whereas /whilst / and
  • noticeable – striking / apparent / clear / obvious
  • year – 12 months / 12 month period
  • went up – increased / rose / jumped / grew
  • significant – considerable / substantial / sizeable
  • just under – just below / almost / nearly / just short of
  • turning to – moving on to
  • conversely – on the other hand / however
  • proportion – percentage / number
  • respond to – reply to / answer / fill in / complete
  • remained – stayed / was / continued

Text Analysis
  • How many paragraphs are there?
  • How many sentences are there in each paragraph?
  • Which sentence paraphrases the statement given in the task outline?
  • What tense is used in the introduction? Why?
  • What other information might you need to include in the introduction?
  • What tense is used to describe the figures in the table and charts? Why?
  • Which paragraph is a summary of the key features of the data with no statistics?
  • Which paragraphs contain statistics?
  • Are all of the figures accurate?
  • What language is used to show comparisons?
  • Which phrase informs us that a figure is not exact?
  • How many synonyms are used for ‘refurbished’? What are the synonyms?
  • Does the answer use a variety of sentence structures and linking devices?
  • Is the answer organised logically and is it easy to read and understand?
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