How to answer this essay?
- Introduce the table.
- This is a ‘static’ type of Task, so you can describe the comparative proportions between the figures effectively, using a variety of language and structures.
- Write the main body paragraphs.
- You can describe the ‘hours per day’ chart first, and group the data logically in descending order, describing how the lowest stands in proportion to the highest (“a quarter of the maximum recorded”). You can then describe the education levels chart, grouping the data by level and again describing the elements from highest downward. This makes the essay feel consistent and well-organised. You can use phrases such as “in the 90s . . . in the mid 20% range” to avoid including too many figures.
- Write the summary sentence and check your work.
- You can use signposting words effectively such as (“regarding, turning to, in summary”), and using the present simple tense is appropriate.
Model Answer | Marked as Band 8
Cohesive connecting words that improve coherence in writing . Useful less common words that boost fluency in writing .
- The tables give facts about the daily TV use by children in various countries, plus the proportion finishing 3 levels of education.
Regarding hours per day watching TV, the USA, Canada and the UK have the highest hours at 4. China and Italy are the next highest with 3, Brazil and India stand at 2 each, and Malta and the UAE have only 1 hour per day, which is a quarter of the maximum recorded.
Turning to academic achievement, we see that 100% of children completed school in Italy, Canada and Malta. The other countries are all in the 90’s, except India which is 80%. High school completion ranges from 100% in Malta to levels in the 90’s (Italy, Canada, UAE) and the 80’s (UK, USA and Brazil). China and India have the lowest levels, with 68% and 60% repectively. For University completion, the UK has the highest level at 39%, followed by Canada (32%) and the USA (29%). Italy, China and Brazil are all in the mid 20% range. The lowest figures here are for Malta and the UAE (18% and 19% repectively) and finally India with only 12%.
In summary, TV use and education levels vary widely. It is noticeable, though, that the countries with the highest hours of TV per day are also those with the highest % levels of university attainment.